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Sharae
05-29-2007, 06:27 PM
http://fc05.deviantart.com/fs30/f/2008/179/2/b/Dog_Eat_Dog_by_Janarchist.jpg

The bar stank of sweat, bodies pushing against bodies to get a drink, or a seat, or to find a better view. The sound of flesh smacking flesh cracked through the warm smoky air.
A hand. A fist. Capillaries crushed into a mass of bruising. Bone crunching. Two men circled each other, blood running freely from cuts and bruises upon their bare chested primal forms. The crowed roared, leering over the rim of the large pit in which the fight took place. Money changed hands quickly.
It was this that interested her. Men beat each other to death here every night, just as in every place she had ever known. It helped nothing, but a little bit of coin would keep her fed and warm.
She watched the transactions while they watched the pit dogs, her mismatched eyes picking a fool or two. She pushed through the crowd, making her way toward the entryway, her nimble fingers slipping into various pockets as she pressed past drunks and hookers, drug crazed bums and fascistic militia. These were her kind. This was her world.
She felt a hand on her arse, alcohol thick breath on her neck as someone very large and very male pressed up behind her. For a moment she became incredibly aware of her fragility, all skin and bones suddenly encircled by muscle, his hands pawing her small pert breasts. She was young; barely a woman, but she knew exactly what he wanted.
She heard a voice cry out in pain, over the snarling crowd she caught the sound of the crunch of a head smashing against the concrete floor over and over again, seeing the blood slick stone and flesh in her minds eye. She heard the crackling transmitter over on the bar then, droning on about the benevolent Prevailers and their God of caring and hope.

Pr0fane
05-29-2007, 06:34 PM
Whoa. That was one intense little encounter there. Great stuff Sharae. Thanks for sharing.

gunslinger
05-31-2007, 01:16 PM
nice work.. I could see it in my mind.. (one small critique .. you change tenses a bit often, it kinda throws it.. )

DA_Demorney
05-31-2007, 01:28 PM
yeah, really intense.

love it

xeoran
05-31-2007, 04:23 PM
That was excellent. :D

More like that please.

DA_Magpie
05-31-2007, 07:27 PM
That was excellent. :D

More like that please.

You heard the man Shar. Get writing!
Seriously, I

caffeine-addict
06-01-2007, 09:20 PM
from across the pond may i say WOW very cool please give us more shar

DA_Magpie
06-02-2007, 08:36 AM
LOL. Shar

caffeine-addict
06-03-2007, 09:04 AM
coolies from the south i shall say wow

xeoran
06-03-2007, 10:22 PM
[quote=Magpie]LOL. Shar

DA_Magpie
06-03-2007, 11:49 PM
Here be dragons! :twisted:

caffeine-addict
06-04-2007, 10:29 AM
just a few miles south of me that would be... here be sheep

xeoran
06-04-2007, 08:34 PM
Here be deep fat fried Mars bars :twisted:

(I'll get me coat...)

With me it's Here be Yuppies. Bloody yuppies.

Qu79
06-05-2007, 12:28 AM
just a few miles south of me that would be... here be sheep

No i resist the urge to type what im thinking, john you swine you always post a response like that and my brain goes it into twisted mode, your a bad man!

why do they always call it the pond when on about the Atlantic ocean, you find row boats on ponds, but im sure as hell id never try to row over to the states in a row boat.

just like the first person to milk a cow what give them the idea and what did people watching think he/her was doing ?

And shar that was a great piece you posted there, very well written and very easy to picture with the descriptions.[/quote]

Jamie
06-05-2007, 07:56 AM
just like the first person to milk a cow what give them the idea and what did people watching think he/her was doing ?

And who looked at the stuff and said "I wonder what that tastes like?"

Sharae
06-06-2007, 05:52 PM
Wow, thanks for all the positive comments guys :D You can thank Magpie for pestering me to post this :P I shall see about writing some more. Oh, and I did a quick little sketchy to go with the story (back on the first page) - enjoy.

xeoran
06-06-2007, 10:57 PM
Like I said, great art!